Raynor Dematrenko

[Raynor]

Basics

Name: Raynor Argus Dematrenko

Nicknames: The Soldier

Age: 16

Birthday: October 13th 1999

Grade: 11th

Power:
Energy Related Discharge: Raynor can use his power to cause a type of discharge of energy. Generally it's an electrical form of it, which he can use as traps or on weapons. He can also use it to control what he refers to them as golomns, which are three foot creatures created from natural material. He can also use this power to fry electronics.

Alchemic Reaction: He draws a type of transmutation circle which causes a burst of energy related discharge's. The more intricate the circle, the stronger the discharge. It can be placed upon any surface, excluding people. The energy is discharged in a wide area, much like a bomb, but only affects those of the electronic, or sentient with an electrical blast. The drawings upon the circle can limit the time it discharges, or the amount. The larger the surface, the more powerful the discharge. However, the problem with this is that it uses the bodies energy to use any form of the power.

Inanimate Life: With the same idea, he can draw a different type of transmutation circle which causes small portions of any element to become small golomns that he has to control. Generally they stand at three foot even. The only thing about this, is a basic transmutation, can create one, a moderate can create two, and a very difficult transmutation creates three or four depending on the material. Harder materials such as metal call for an even MORE intricate circle, where as wood and dirt calls for a rather basic one. All the golomns can do is to grapple, or hold an oponent. The adverse affect of this condition is that he can only do one or the other type of transmutation because it uses the body's energy.


Member Group: Prefect

Canon or not: Not

Appearance:
Raynor Dematrenko stands at roughly 5'6, has a slight muscle build, and pale skin with black hair that is medium length and light green eyes. He generally wears his military beret which is white to match the Prefects uniform with the symbol of his homeland upon it. He generally has a very clean and profesional look, as well as his grooming. He doesn't have facial hair yet, and he has black military combat boots.

He has various medals he occasionally wears at Prefect meetings, such as Leadership Awards and other such things that were bestowed upon him for things he's done. But other than the fancy medals, the only other thing that could connect him with his previous life would be his dog tags, which are a polished silver.

In all, Raynor is rather tall for his age, with a slight muscle build, pale skin, and very few things that remind him of his home. Though very few, they are very dear to him. The day he was training to be a Spetznaz has an obvious visible effect as well as a mental one.

Personality

Overall Personality:
Raynor is a very decisive, and precise individual. Through military training, and hooning of the mind, he can remain calm under pressure, and make tactical decisions that would benefit himself, and those around him. Quick on his feet, loyal, and always obeys his orders. He is the very model of what a soldier should be.

Raynor has always been calm and collected, but the traits he also has he developed over the years of training. Analyzing an opponent, and seeking out the best way to deal with them, is precisely why he was chosen to represent the Dematrenko family as a prefect at the school. He loves fighting, and generally tends to be the one who doesn't initiate it, but godes the person into swinging. Psychologically, he is about as sane as a person could get with going through years of gruelling training, and punishment that has caused immense physical and psychological pain.
Raynor has had no real social life outside the military. He commands respect, and gives it to those who have more or less proven there worth. He may seem at first the type to act out, and lash at superior's, but the truth of the matter is, it's his way of gauging out the people he will be working with and for. His father has placed alot of trust on him to be the model soldier he was.

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History

Family Members/guardians:
Mother: Name- Lux Dematrenko. Current Conditon, Deceased after childbirth
Father: Name- Lt. Dematrenko. Current Condition, Alive
Brother: Name- SGT. Borris Dematrenko. Current Condition, Deceased
Uncle: Name- Major Curtz Dematrenko. Current Condition, Alive

History:
Raynor Dematrenko was born in the city of Stalingrad on October 13th 1999. He grew to the age of five, as a normal child would, and began to start training for the Spetznaz Military which was directed by his family. At the top of his class in Russia's ROTC program during his first year of High School, he earned multiple military schooling honors and achievments that he more or less didn't care for. That was his first year in the ROTC program. His whole world was based on graduating, and becoming a Spetznaz for his homeland, however, upon hearing the tragic story of his brother's death, he fell into a deep depression, and the family took up his training from there.

While running a live fire excersize his father ordered him to do, he was behind a brick wall, and his father had ordered him to run through the full course with out getting hit, telling him that one in five bullets were real, instead of the practice rounds. When he leaned out to look for the next spot of cover, he discovered he was surrounded by open area's with very little to no cover. From there, he had two decision's, to  either run out and hope for the best, or wait and see.  Eventually it got to the point where his father would walk over to his position, and beat him with a wooden baton. The routine continued like this for three weeks, until he had the idea of drawing while he waited. When he was done drawing the circle, he squatted and sighed. From the ground rose up a four foot dirt gollum. He then had the idea to use it as cover, and that was how he finished the run. His father was terrified of this latent power, and immediatley called his superior's.

When the accounts of his father were heard, they were laughed at, and scoffed at. Raynor's father was then led to the base he had visited many times, and there, his father ordered him to do what he did while on his trainning run. Raynor took a deep breath, and got the idea of drawing a differenct circle instead, the resulting conclusion was similar to an energy discharge but it only affected electronics, and organic life. His father was slightly injured, and survived, as to, did his superiror officer, who recommended him to let Raynor attend Ashford. From there, he was told to pack his things, his ROTC uniform, and be ready to go to the Ashford institute.

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[Headmistress Kayla]

PENDING
- please space out your paragraphs. It makes it much easier for the staff to understand.
- history and context wise, your character's past does not make sense. First of all, Russia does not train child soldiers. You mention the death of his brother, but do not elaborate on the impact. Please change that. Second, I don't think he would be allowed into battle at age 16 unless he lied about his age. Also, America and Russia have not done joint operations since before the Cold War, and considering you placed his app in modern times, this does not make sense.
- Next, one does not "apply" to Ashford. You can willing go, but Ashford's existence is not public knowledge.
- the powers will be evaluated by another staff member.

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[Professor Vox]

As far as the powers go, I don't have a problem at all with the actual premise. We have plenty of characters that can make explosions or energy discharge of some kind. However, I do have some things that need to be changed.

-My primary issue with the explosions is that the circles which trigger them can be applied to organic matter, which potentially could allow the character to destroy a human target mid combat with no way for said target to defend. While I realize the circumstances where this could happen *are* limited, it does fall under the "no auto hitting" policy, and so I feel it needs to be changed. My suggestion for fixing this would simply be to apply the same limitation as there is in the series you're drawing the power from, that being that the circles only work when applied to a non-organic target. This gives him the ability to still have quite high destructive potential, while eliminating the potential for power play. I would also suggest adding a limitation that the mass of the item being detonated directly affects the energy output of the explosion. In other words, a more intricate circle drawn on say a slip of paper would produce a lower yield explosion than a more intricate circle drawn on a tree, or the wall of a building.

-I have no problem with the golems as we have had animation powers here before.

-As far as limitations go, these look to be in order for the most part. However, I will need there to be some kind of negative impact on the character from creating these explosions or bringing the golems to life. You mention that a more intricate circle is required, but not that the power takes a toll on the character himself. The simplest suggestion I can provide is that the more intricate the circle, the more energy is drawn from the character in order to create the effect. But there must be some limitation to the power that directly weakens its user as a result. For example, Calista Rosa *can* take in and survive any poison, but conversely must suffer its effects for a time.

Once these two issues have been fixed, the powers are good to go in my opinion.